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poems- would love some constructive criticism
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
You are infinitely welcome. You can always PM me if you need help or advice ![Smile :)](./images/smilies/happeh.gif)
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
I personally think that the fear one is very good
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
thank you. I was asked by my eighth grade english teacher to type Fear up so she could add it to a list of poems by 'teens like me' and now I can look at my poem in a book. Its pretty awesome to do, but it gives you a hot head for a while.
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
their really good! you should keep writing them:D!
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
loss for better is probably my favorite,but i think in some of the other ones,use more pronounce wordds,so the reader gets the feeling too
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Re: poems- would love some constructive criticism
these are sooooo awesome! Good job! ![Hooray! :hooray:](./images/smilies/hoeray.png)
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Your really showing your true colors. I like it, your doing great. My full support, they are amazing. 100% perfection, keep it up!
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