How the gryphons Came to be and
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Re: How the gryphons Came to be
I just thought i should say your help is appreciated but I want a comment on the Story not on Grammar and puncuation
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Re: How the gryphons Came to be
can someone please comment on the story? ![In the emo corner :t-corner:](./images/smilies/teal_sitincorner.gif)
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Re: How the gryphons Came to be and
The story that can't be read for the grammar?
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It is difficult to read the story and make any sense of it because the grammar is so mangled. We can't respond to the story if we can't read it.
Re: How the gryphons Came to be
Morgaln wrote:Please put in some interpunctation and paragraphs. Without any pauses, this is extremely hard to read.
I agree with Morgaln hard to read and without pauses....
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Your sentences are like paragraphs,
Very hard to read indeed
Very hard to read indeed
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Re: How the gryphons Came to be and
you know please don't comment