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Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Sorren1224 » June 5th, 2012, 6:44:07 pm

Okay, this is my first attempt at a creepy story. Be as rude as you like. I won't mind. It sucks, I just want critique.
WARNING! Contains blood. Obviously.
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby MustachioGirl » June 5th, 2012, 7:55:11 pm

Hey I think I love this story XD not kidding :o

Is that all? I just wanna know what happens next
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Sorren1224 » June 5th, 2012, 7:57:04 pm

I could write more, if you really want.
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby MustachioGirl » June 5th, 2012, 8:02:48 pm

I really want! I really want!
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Sorren1224 » June 5th, 2012, 8:19:06 pm

Okay, I will.
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Postby Platypoose » June 16th, 2012, 8:59:25 am

It's good. If you want to work more on it, it has a lot of promise. If you make it longer, reveal the monster-creature-thing's story later on, and have the last little bit "the warning" as an epilogue or something.
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Sorren1224 » June 17th, 2012, 9:41:07 am

Since more tha oe person wants me to finish this/expand on it, I will make it into a full-out short story. Eventually :lol:
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Postby MustachioGirl » June 17th, 2012, 11:04:51 am

Yay! I can't wait!
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Celestialgirl32 » July 6th, 2012, 12:18:59 am

I really love it, it actually got me inspired to write a really horrific horror story. Can't wait to read the rest of your story...and to see what becomes of my own attempt at writing a horror story that good X3
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Re: Failed attempt at creepy story-

Postby Sorren1224 » July 6th, 2012, 9:29:17 am

Haha really? Cool, I inspired someone.

I was inspired by all of Johnny Depp's movies... excepting Charlie and the Chocolate factory and Pirates of the Carribean, of course.
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