MagiStream

It's okay, but it is a bit confusing and the emotion in the poem isn't really portrayed very strongly. But it's not too bad though. What I understand of your idea is intriguing.

I'm going to hazard a guess at the story of the poem, pardon if this is way off mark

The speaker isn't exactly a normal human, he has some sort of mutation/disease/is a robot (XP). Basically something abnormal, possibly powerful and dangerous to the ones around him. The mutation/disease/etc is probably not natural, and I get the idea that speaker has been purposely made into a weapon. He's questioning those who made him- "why am I like this? why must I be like this?"

Overall it's still pretty okay, I just favor some of your other poems. XP

And just to make this more relevant, a poem:

Numbers play leap-frog on
the blank canvas playground, shrieking
in laughter at the students' confused faces.

They taunt and jeer like schoolyard bullies
cartwheeling around in bewildering loops
Solve us! Put us in line! We dare you to!

And in a corner, x hides
unwilling to come out.

(algebra sucks. XP)

Hunting alone
All alone
No family
No friends
Nothing
When you see
That no one loves you
Its hard
then you find the one
the one that loves you
you have found a friend
family



This is to pit bulls. I know that they don't understand this, But i love them and when i am able to get one. That will be my first dog that i get at my own house! I LOVE YOU PITTY'S

Nice poem, although I think it could be made more specific to apply to pit bulls. Now the poem can apply to all strays, really.

But still, a lovely poem. You have a great love for pit bulls, don't you?

Thanks for the idea's, and yes i do, very much! i them

((Trying to bring this back to life))

Prisoner

Sitting in my dark room,
Prisoner of my dangerous mind.
Shadows roam free all around,
Taunting me of my crimes.
The darkness swirls all around me,
In flashing colors exploding around the room.
They tell me to break out,
To cause trouble, instead of waiting for truth
I'm waiting for the flashing bright sun,
To clear my soul of the grime,
To make all the shadows run away in fright,
To have truth come and save me from this time.
But here I am,
sitting in my dark room.
Without a single thought of joy,
With my heart, full of gloom.

So, a really bad poem about a guy/girl whose mind is insane, and he is trying to break free of the madness, but the "sun" isn't rising, so he can't. Something like that.

haha thanks for bring it back! and that is very nice! i like it! nice "So what" as one of my teachers call it.

Thanks! I was just looking through my posts, and I saw this, so I decided to try and write in it.

Well that was very good.

Once you find someone,
You never need to go back.
If you love something,
Don't let it go!


This was just a random one.

Here's a poem:

I guess I have to
write this poem
for English class.
But she says
that she wants to see
what we can do.
Well, I can think!
So I'll write my thoughts.
The clouds are fluffy.
This is easy!
A bird flies by my window
on a journey
to his nest
in a pine tree.
I like poetry!
All you have to do is
make
short
lines.

~~ Pig

This is the kind of poetry I like to do.

Bwhaha, i like that. It made my laugh and i kinda like it. I never really thought to write a poem like that before. But i like it. Very funny. Keep writing.

Pride shows how you love,
Pride, from the Steelers.
Here we go, Steelers, here we go,
There going to win the super bowl.
Pride, pitt pride.


This is just a little poem i wipped up watching the game right now.