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Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 4 Up

Posted: February 12th, 2011, 2:07:42 pm
by Lunaheart
She's turned into half of her Quartzalcoatl!!! OMG!!! right?

It was a little hard to follow at first, but then it got easier to read once I figured it out...

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 4 Up

Posted: February 12th, 2011, 4:31:53 pm
by Ceres
more!please?

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 4 Up

Posted: February 12th, 2011, 11:20:24 pm
by Caseycatjasper
I'm in the process of 5.

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 5 Up

Posted: February 13th, 2011, 2:36:25 pm
by Caseycatjasper
(Leisha again!)

High school is a nightmare. Running to classes, constant pressure, cliques, etc. can really mess up your head. That is, if your head isn’t already messed up by other stuff.

Like the fact that you have wings.

I’m sure this doesn’t apply to everyone out there, but still.

“How are you holding up?” asked Kara.

“Fine, fine. Although I wish everyone would stop staring at me.”

First period: English. The letters swam meaninglessly in front of my eyes. I felt a sharp prick in my back, like someone had stuck a needle in me.

“Ow! Quit it!” I hissed at my attacker. He started, surprised. I saw he was holding a feather. “You do not do that, okay?” I whipped back around to the front, not waiting for an answer.

The rest of the day continued in much the same way. In band, I noticed the half – inch long fangs that Kara had so kindly neglected to mention.

“I didn’t want to upset you more than you already were,” she shrugged when I asked her.

By the end of the day, I was in a foul mood. I took it out on Kara as we were walking to our respective homes.

“I don’t know what to do.”

“Look, we’ll know more tomorrow. I checked a book out of the library that might have some answers.”

I turned on her. “Tomorrow isn’t good enough! I have to know today! I have the right to know what happened to me!”

“Leisha, I – “

I hissed at her. She stepped back, I turned and ran.

What happened to me? How can it be reversed? Can it be reversed? Questions that I couldn’t answer. It infuriated me. I landed on by back in my keep tower. I was exhausted, and I slept there among the creatures.

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 5 Up

Posted: February 14th, 2011, 7:49:54 pm
by Caseycatjasper
Seriously, I need feedback. Also, I might be offering a new character contest sometime in the future. (Possibly. Ideas? D: )

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 5 Up

Posted: February 15th, 2011, 8:22:22 pm
by Caseycatjasper
If no one posts in the next three days, I'm posting chapter six and leaving.

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 5 Up

Posted: February 15th, 2011, 9:29:45 pm
by Kestrad
Intriguing so far! I like the suspense you set up and how you show us everything that's happening rather than simply stating "and then this happened. And then I did this." etc.

Aside, don't get discouraged if no one comments. Many people lurk around good stories but are too shy to say anything. I actually find the policy of not updating if no one comments a bit silly. Writing is something that shouldn't be done just for the sake of others. It is most important to do it for your own enjoyment and exercise.

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 6 Up

Posted: February 15th, 2011, 10:28:06 pm
by Caseycatjasper
Kara met me the next day at lunch. She plopped down a book in front of me, releasing a cloud of dust. “Just this one more.”

“You’ve said that for the last hour.”

“Yeah, but seriously, this is the last one.” I rolled my eyes and scanned the index.

“Let’s see, creature training, creature abilities, Companions, creature bonding –“ My finger stopped at these
words, my mouth open in a silent o. I flipped to the page and read out loud.

“There is but one wae to bonde kreature and master, and this wae is known only by three: Masters Thane, Tristan, and Belmos.”

I looked at Kara, and she shrugged. “Out of date.” I kept reading.

“This bonde does rekwire two eggs of koi, and yet five more of the Northern kitsune.”

“Again, out of date. They didn’t start calling them Arkenian until they named Arkene.”

“Will you shush? Anyway, Thy cauldron shall boil under the half-moon, and thou shalt drop in the eggs, and stir thrice. Thou shalt add thy mixture to seven handfuls of the purest of gold, and say this spell.”

A pause.

“Well? What does it say?”

“Nothing. After this it’s blank.”

“Blank.”

I nodded grimly. “Maybe they didn’t know the spell.”

We sat in silence for a while.

“Now what?”

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 6 Up

Posted: February 15th, 2011, 10:32:51 pm
by Sooke18
MOD EDIT: Eggspam removed!

Re: Silent Wings Keep Stories - Chapter 6 Up

Posted: February 15th, 2011, 11:49:52 pm
by Caseycatjasper
Okay, comments are nice, but don't you think eggspam is going a little too far?