Pokemon; Squiby's story (( PHAIL, but please read))

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Pokemon; Squiby's story (( PHAIL, but please read))

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I got this story idea for pokemon when my friend and I were Rping. ( real life) I was Squiby, a baby arceus, and my friend ( patapon706) was a baby palkia named Patapon. I won't tell you any more because I don't want to spoil the story, but here goes: ( oh, btw, don't ask about the names :facepalm: )

Chapter One
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Squiby was falling. She felt as if she was falling through space and time itself. Falling headfirst into never ending spirals of blue and pink ....With a burst of light, she felt like she landed on something hard. Her head was dizzy and her skin felt burned. The scent of Ozone hung in the air, reminding Squiby of the trip to Rayquaza's territory. Small pokemon were scurrying away from her, as if she was some kind of unnatural disease. Her whole body ached, and her energy felt drained. Lifting her head, she looked around weakly. She was lying in a pile of rubble. There was grass and trees dotted around. Other than that, there was no sign of life. I must be on Earth, Squiby thought. Whoa! How'd I get on EARTH!? Shaking her head, she looked around again. Yup, it was definitely Earth. Squiby let her head drop down again, registering in shock that she was on EARTH, where the humans and other strange pokemon lived. She eventually drifted off into an uneasy sleep, having nightmares of falling into nothingness.
When Squiby finally awoke, it was raining. Hard. Great, She thought. Just my luck, I fall out of my dimension and into Earth. Now it's raining to add to my misery. Sighing, she lifted her head and tried to stand up. her legs wobbled a bit as she rose unsteadily, shaking rubble off. What to do now? She was wondering when a voice behind her said, "What are YOU doing here?"
Comments and critiques would be great, so would some advice. Thank you for reading my story! :wave:
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XD its kinda funny,because i dont think arceus's would think of other pokemon as strange,even if they r babies XD.
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Ah well, perhaps, perhaps. Remember, Squiby is the great Arceus's daughter.
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I thought you wanted to name an ice octopus hatchling Squiby? (AGH I wanna name one Squibby) :haha:
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And a pokemon by any chance. ^_^ SpiritAtSoul, It doesn't really matter, a lot if other users have named theirs Squiby. (with only ONE b)
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Zen,didn't you say you want a army of frozen Ice Octipy name Squiby?Or was that someone else....? :facepalm: :sulk:
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That was me, yes, and I want COMMENTS on the STORY, please. >.<
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Zenna wrote:That was me, yes, and I want COMMENTS on the STORY, please. >.<
Sorry. (Well I like it with 2 b's.) :italian:
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Whatever :t-X3:
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I like it. Moar plz? :haha:

Very descriptive. :3
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