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The Storm

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Just a quick oneshot. I may make this the first chapter of a longer story in the future.

Edit: Removed for now. Storm Steeds are awesome.
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:omg: Awesome. Very nicely written. c:
Storm steeds ftw.
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... :t-O_O:

AWESOME, Raneth.

How long did it take you to write that? :well:





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Re: The Storm

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Dunno...about two hours? Maybe a bit less?

I'm glad people liked it. :D
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Just some bad critique under the spoiler, don't read it you don't want any~
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The ending feels a bit... abrupt, so to say. :derp:
Other than that, this is wonderful. :hooray:

now, The Final Exam? /shot





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If this story were an introduction to a novel, it would be a great lead-in to the main story.

Hmmm...How about it? I would like to see this story continue and answer a lot of questions the ending leaves open: For instance, why did the Storm Steed happen to show up when it did?

Who sent the creature to rescue Alder just in time?

How was Alder able to mount the Storm Steed with his ankles tied together and his arms tied behind his back? Even assuming the Steed gave him the strength to get up and mount, there is nothing in the story that indicates Alder's bonds were released.

If the Steed did come "just because", why would it decide to take Alder to the Keep?
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Thanks guys. It is very possible that I could continue this if enough people wanted. :D
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Yes please Raneth! This is amazing... I have to know what happens next! Please?
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Ffffreakin' Raneth! I so very much enjoy reading your stuff - especially because of your take on the magi-world. Love it.

Makes me want to team up with you to make a MagiStream graphic novel o3o
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GlassWalker wrote:Ffffreakin' Raneth! I so very much enjoy reading your stuff - especially because of your take on the magi-world. Love it.

Makes me want to team up with you to make a MagiStream graphic novel o3o
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