Normal is Crazy

This section is for any writing set in a world not of your own making, whether it is the Magistream world or any other.

Moderator: Tea House Moderators

Post Reply
User avatar
blackpearl
CreaturesTrade
Posts: 1968
Joined: February 24th, 2011, 7:19:26 pm
Gender: Female
Location: United States

Normal is Crazy

Post by blackpearl »

Stuff
Spoiler
Okay so this is a story on people that are specail and i don't want to spoil the suprize, so you will have to read the story! ^_^ and also this is BASED off of a Tv show called H2O, it is not the whole story line
Story
Ann was a 15 year old girl, that loved the water. she was on the swim team, and she had been swimming since she was 5. She loved the water. Then her best friend, Grace. She never really liked the water because she had almost drooned once. Since that time she has never touched the water. But both of them life next to the ocean. Of the coast of Marko island. Ann would go there every day and take a swim, but grace would watch as she got a sun tan. But one day, Ann had an idea to make Grace love the water as much as she did. And that was to find a shallow part to the island were she could stand, and then make her get in. "Grace, come on, i have a new place to swim, and you can get a sun tan" Grace looked at Ann, thinking about why she would want to go somewhere else. Grace nodded thinking that everything would be okay. But when they got into the deep woods. Ann got a little worried because she couldn't find where she was going. They came across a bridge step, where they would have to jump over the it. Ann was the one that would do anything. That isn't afraid of anything. But Grace on the other hand, was afriad of everything. Ann jumped across the bidge, and it couldn't be easier. The Grace looked how far it was down and backed up. "come on Grace" Ann yelled. Ann backed up waiting for her to jump. But as Ann backed up, she tripped and fell into this cave. Ann screamed and slid down the mud slide. Grace saw what happened and jumped, not thinking about her fear. "Ann, Ann, are you okay?" Grace yelled. "Im fine, but you have to come down here" Ann yelled. "Are you crazy..?" Grace asked. When she was trying to help her, she also slid down the mud slide. "Help! Help!" Grace yelled as she was slidding down. When she hit down were Ann was, she looked around sitting by her. "wow" Grace said, "i know" Ann replied. "This is amazing" Grace said. In that cave like area, there was amazing rock and speakly dimonds everywhere. But in the middle of the cave, there was a little puddle like pool. It was bigger then a puddle, but nothing comparted to the ocean. "was this another joke to try to get me in that water?" Grace asked Ann. "no, no i swear" Ann said. And Grace knew that she was wasn't kidding becasue when she "swears" on anything, she wasn't kidding. Ann was happy that she had found this place. She loved swimming. "well come on" Ann said, "lets take a swim" She said. "No, there is no way" Grace said. When Ann walked over to the pool, she looked up. And there was an opening in the cave, almost volcano looking. And it was getting dark " come on lets get out of here, it's getting dark" Grace said. "no where" Ann said. "Let me take on dip, then we can leave." She said walking over to Grace. "But your coming with me" Ann said. Grace was scared "NO!" She yelled. But Ann was just a bit bigger then Grace, so she over powered her; and took her to the edge of the pool. Ann held her hand, telling her it was okay. But Grace gibbed so hard that she was making her hand go numb. "Wow, look up" Ann said. Grace looked up and saw the moon, the moon right over the opening in the cave. Right when that happened. Grace slipped and fell into the pool, bringing Ann in with her. Grace strated freaking out. But then something started happening to the water. Something that you wouldn't like it's good. The water started bubbling, not like when you jump in, then wait and it will stop. "whats happening?" Grace asked all scared. "I don't know." Ann replied. Her voice was scared to. But she had never been scared before. Then, out of the blue, the bubbles stopped. The girls went to stand up then, boom, they were back underwater. But this time when they come up, they would never be the same. Their whole lifes have changed from there on out.

(This is Chapter One, hope you all like it. Chapter two will be up very soon! )
Image
User avatar
Raneth
Hello World
CreaturesTrade
Posts: 9751
Joined: March 8th, 2010, 5:15:23 pm

Re: Normal is Crazy

Post by Raneth »

Moved this to where it belongs. Please pay attention to where you put your threads in the future.
ImageImageImage

Pretty ponies...
User avatar
Dauntless
Member of The Dark Brotherhood
CreaturesTrade
Posts: 7898
Joined: May 15th, 2011, 3:10:24 pm
Gender: Male
Location: In your kitchen complaining that you have no decent food.

Re: Normal is Crazy

Post by Dauntless »

Its a good start but here is something I noticed. When you use quotation marks (") after one person has finished saying something you need to make a new paragraph. example below:
Bob walked slowly on the hard sidewalk with Bill. "So Bill, How have you been doing these days?" Bob asked.
Bill turned to Bob. "Not bad Bob," Bill replied.
Bob nodded and watched cars pass by. The silence and lack of conversation made Bob feel uncomfortable.
Image Image
it's where
mydemons hide


PLEASE! Do not call be Daunt, do not call me Less, call me Dauntless.
"What didn't kill me, never made me stronger at all."
User avatar
blackpearl
CreaturesTrade
Posts: 1968
Joined: February 24th, 2011, 7:19:26 pm
Gender: Female
Location: United States

Re: Normal is Crazy

Post by blackpearl »

Thanks, For the next one i write, it will be fixed. ^_^
Image
Post Reply

Return to “The Den”