~Stories from Rayven's Keep~
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LightningDragon
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Re: ~Stories from Rayven's Keep~
Thanks for the critique, Kestrad. I truly hadn't thought of most of those. This story is still in the makings, so I'll go back and edit the parts that don't add in or make sense.
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Lunaheart
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Re: ~Stories from Rayven's Keep~
One thing of criticism from me would be to differentiate between the friends. I find that there are a lot of names and personalities with your characters, but I do find myself getting confused as to who is who. Don't get me wrong, I love your characters, but there needs to be some sort of division between them all instead of dumping characters out. I must admit that I often do the same thing. I love making characters, and I love to implement them into stories, but too much at one time makes people confused.
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LightningDragon
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Re: ~Stories from Rayven's Keep~
I see your point. Maybe I could add another chapter more in-depth with the characters, so readers would understand the differences between them all.