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Re: Warrior Cat Chapter story! Woot! Please vote on Poll! :D
But then your going to make Tuesday, Wednesday, and Thursday feel left out!!! You had better just write a chapter a day, just to be on the safe side.
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Chapter 4
Forestpaw tried not to wince as the scent of a young cat's smelly breath hissed an order. Forestpaw nodded slowly, then ran off to go hunting. She knew she wasn't actually going to hunt. Just relax, and take one of her kills from earlier. She scampered up a tree and laid down with a sigh. She kept watch for any of the guards constantly patrolling the area. She silently closed her eyes and accidentally fell into a deep sleep...
Forestpaw tried not to wince as the scent of a young cat's smelly breath hissed an order. Forestpaw nodded slowly, then ran off to go hunting. She knew she wasn't actually going to hunt. Just relax, and take one of her kills from earlier. She scampered up a tree and laid down with a sigh. She kept watch for any of the guards constantly patrolling the area. She silently closed her eyes and accidentally fell into a deep sleep...
Re: Warrior Cat Chapter story! Woot! Please vote on Poll! :D
Ah,it's okay.I know how it feels.I have SUCH a late lunch,and I only get,like,ten minutes to eat.And I usually end up staying up to catch up with everything.Ugh,I have no time for nothing else,but I get to play a little,thank God.
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It's alright, maybe a bit short to call them chapters and very vague on details. Try not just giving the allegiances *or however you spell that* But actually describing the cats in the story.
You state that a snow storm recentley killed the others but I don't feel like they grieve enough, and I don't think they would be immediate to band together either. But that is just me.
You state that a snow storm recentley killed the others but I don't feel like they grieve enough, and I don't think they would be immediate to band together either. But that is just me.
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Thanks for the feedback. It's a few moons after the snowstorm, and they've already grieved. I'll take that into consideration, though.
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Well then you should probably state it has been a few moons. Also, why was Ppinepaw taken? I'd siggest slowly giving small details and then dropping the truth altogether but again just me.
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