Neferankh the Temple cat and The Myth of the elements

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Neferankh the Temple cat and The Myth of the elements

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Neferankh the Temple cat
Oniuadjit was a daughter of a Caravan she despised her life always traveling on a dusty trail lifting boxes or advertising her mother had died before she was even 3 and her father didn't do much of anything he just sat there while she did the merchanting. The one thing that had made her life bearable was her cat Neferankh.Neferankh was a pale cream with purple eyes she always helped with everything. one day after coming back from the market stall Neferankh was gone! Oniuadjit tore the house apart looking for Neferankh, but she was no more.She wondered where the cat had went, many months later Oniuadjit decided she couldn't take life, so she decided to run to the desert to die of dehydration.The heat was unbearable, and because her life was too hard to take alone. So she waited on a hot rock to arrive at deaths door, she waited through night and day until her cat, Neferankh appeared to her mewing for her to follow, she was almost too weak to follow after she reached an unknown town, Oniuadjit fainted when she woke Neferankh was looking at her purring, she didn't know where she was but judging by the architecture it was a place of worship but then a priest asked her who she was she replied "Oniuadjit of Sinai" he replied "well you are far from home then" "Is this your cat?" "yes" she replied She looked at her cat Neferankh, Neferankh had saved her from death.

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The Myth of the elements
In a Island Far
Three lords did rule
The three were of Fire ,Earth ,Water
Fire Was Destructive and Hindering
Earth was calm and Compensating
Water was Strong but was full of Lust
Fire Conquered Earth
Water conquered Fire
Earth Conquered Water
Twas an internal loop
Not even a bird could Swoop
When This War did Rage
It all came down to a unloyal page
Who Prayed
for this horrible loop to reach a end
It only did when God send
a Star
To calm this Eternal Struggle
It did but not for long
For the Lordess of Fire be a Dragon
Lord of earth be the deadly Basilisk
and the Lord of Water be the Uncegila
And the Star was a Maiden Fair but mystical
When the star hit the land separated
Earth's Land would no longer Burn
Waters Land would no longer become overgrowth
Fire's land would no longer Drown
all was well
From these lands Creatures came
and The Myth of the Elements were born




What do you think of these? a long version of them would have made a good book but i don't think they are good enough to win
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I thought i should add the cats name means Beautiful Life
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Hmm, you're poem could've been better but I do like it! ^_^
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yeah its not really a poem just played around with formats
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i just added more punctuation
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