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Postby aurora37 » July 20th, 2011, 7:11:15 am

Some poems I wrote...I'd love some feedback, please!

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Hello, fellow Magi, and welcome to my Poetry Cafe! Here you can find all sorts of poems I've written. I welcome feedback of all kinds: suggestions for improvement, compliments, criticism, etc, etc, etc. Most of all, I hope you'll enjoy reading these as much as I've enjoyed writing them.

Enjoy!

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UNTITLED NEW!
(Anyone interested in helping me name this?)


MADE HE-MADE SHE NEW!


AUTUMN II(Haiku) NEW!


THE WILD IS CALLING NEW!


TANKAS


CINQUAINS


HOPE


MUSIC


THAT LITTLE DROP/THE WATER CYCLE


A POEM INSULTING WAR


AUTUMN I



HOW SHALL THE LITTLE LARK SING NEW!
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Re: A few poems...would love any feedback!

Postby aurora37 » August 12th, 2011, 5:39:08 pm

Hm...I think this needs a bump :wave:
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Re: A few poems...would love any feedback!

Postby deweesek » August 12th, 2011, 6:53:36 pm

You're really good!!!
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Re: A few poems...would love any feedback!

Postby aurora37 » August 12th, 2011, 7:50:31 pm

deweesek wrote:You're really good!!!


Thank you! <3 :wave:
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Postby Ceres » August 12th, 2011, 9:50:13 pm

That's fantastic! I especially like the Tankas and the one about hope ^_^
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Re: A few poems...would love any feedback!

Postby aurora37 » August 13th, 2011, 2:04:51 am

Thank yous to both. <3 :wave:

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Postby aurora37 » August 14th, 2011, 11:54:20 pm

A POEM INSULTING WAR added :wave:
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Postby rainswings » August 15th, 2011, 5:34:32 am

i is in love with a poem insulting war
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Re: A few poems...would love any feedback!

Postby aurora37 » August 15th, 2011, 6:04:05 pm

rainswings wrote:i is in love with a poem insulting war


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Postby aurora37 » August 15th, 2011, 6:04:34 pm

AUTUMN I posted ("I" as there's probably going to be more about Autumn-it's my favorite season, you see).
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