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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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From the new quest:
winding around the path down a path you've never traveled before
English isn't my native language, but this sentence seems really odd to me
telling you thisis a bad, bad idea
Missing a space
cobra--that must be Adela--slithers
Missing spaces between characters and proper dashes
"Ah ah, you wanted to come." he spreads


A dot instead of a comma
You consider your options for a moment and then decide to tell him you're interested and that you're staying.
“Excellent.” Alethin smiles, white teeth flashing.
I believe, there were meant to be an interval between these lines.
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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Doing the Artificer Association quest, noticed this bit:
A closer look at the man shows that he's overall in a state of disarray, clothes similarly dirties,
Should probably be "dirtied" at the end. Either that or "dirty", one of the two.

Then a bit later, still the first quest text in Synara:
Birchoff glances you smugly as you hesitate.
Missing a preposition there; "glances at you smugly" or something similar.

The third bit of the quest also has something in it. (When you first meet Kara):
simply smiles at waves at you
First "at" ought to be an "and", likely.

(It'll be a while before I get a thunderbird egg, with all the Urhyz in the stream, so later bits of the quest will be looked at later...)
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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So I was looking in the bestiary at the Dusk Cinersi and I noticed that the species name is "Dusk Cinersi" though everytime the description mentioned them they were called "Cinerusi" or "Cinerus". I wasn't going to highlight anything specific as it is every time they were mentioned by name, but here is a quick bestiary link

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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

Post by Bantymom »

I hope this correction is ok to post.

"xxxx just threw a sticky half melted chocolate egg at you!"

should be
"xxxx just threw a sticky half-melted chocolate egg at you!"

("Half" is modifying "melted," not "egg.")
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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Sooo both the Falx and Nazar Owl pages say that they were the "October 2013 3-shard Donation Pet". I think (though I only found this in the first place because I wanted to look that up, since I'm not 100% sure) the nazar owls were the 5-shard?
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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This is not necessarily a typo, but "stand" in the 'Popsicle stand' forum title is not capitalized. All of the other forum names are properly capitalized. I'm not sure whether this was intentional. xD
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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From the description for the Ice Octopus:

"Whatever unfortunate animal resting above them crashes into the waters, where the ice octopuses began to feed."

Tense errors and also this makes no sense.
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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Vetus Adult Description

There is no great difference between a young vetus and a fully grown vetus companion.They possess the same skills and are alike in most regards save size. Vetusess grow to be fairly large, but can seem smaller due to their movements. Instead of raising themselves up to full height, vetuses slither along the ground, only keeping their heads raised as they do so. They are bright blue or green in color, which makes them rather hard to miss. Their wings are eye catching as well, quite large as they extend out from their backs. Despite these impressive appendages, vetus companions are incapable of flight. Rather, they use their wings to propel themselves along, catching whatever wind is blowing through the Arkene . When great storms hit, vetuses can even achieve short flight, before they are lost to human sight. There are few who would risk a northern storm simply to observe these companions. There are some that do, though, and they swear that these creatures do not just survive these storms, but instead somehow become part of the storms. A few magi insist that they have seen vetuses dissolve into a whirling storm, reappearing only when the snow dies down. Of course, the general consensus is that any creature would disappear from eyesight during a storm, and there is no true evidence that vetuses possess this power. After all, no one has ever witnessed a vetus undergoing such a change in clear sight.
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

Post by pegasi1978 »

The part in red is correct because it is saying the primary difference between a young and an adult of the species is their size.
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Re: You made a typo, Magistream

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chrystyme1996 wrote:Vetus Adult Description

There is no great difference between a young vetus and a fully grown vetus companion.They possess the same skills and are alike in most regards >save< size. Vetusess grow to be fairly large, but can seem smaller due to their movements. Instead of raising themselves up to full height, vetuses slither along the ground, only keeping their heads raised as they do so. They are bright blue or green in color, which makes them rather hard to miss. Their wings are eye catching as well, quite large as they extend out from their backs. Despite these impressive appendages, vetus companions are incapable of flight. Rather, they use their wings to propel themselves along, catching whatever wind is blowing through the Arkene . When great storms hit, vetuses can even achieve short flight, before they are lost to human sight. There are few who would risk a northern storm simply to observe these companions. There are some that do, though, and they swear that these creatures do not just survive these storms, but instead somehow become part of the storms. A few magi insist that they have seen vetuses dissolve into a whirling storm, reappearing only when the snow dies down. Of course, the general consensus is that any creature would disappear from eyesight during a storm, and there is no true evidence that vetuses possess this power. After all, no one has ever witnessed a vetus undergoing such a change in clear sight.
pegasi1978 wrote:The part in red is correct because it is saying the primary difference between a young and an adult of the species is their size.
the part i added the arrow too dont make sence
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