Journey to Silva-An MS Story

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Journey to Silva-An MS Story

Postby BBkat » November 21st, 2011, 11:52:32 am

This is the story I wrote for Enchanteddil and NellaFantasia's writing contest Journey to the Unknown
The aim was to pick a path and then write about what happens next. While this story is mine, the character 'Anita the Pack Rat' belongs to them as does the whole idea for this contest. You can read the first part of the story here as well as my chosen path (Path G) if you wish to read those first, though it isn't needed. (That's all the crediting done I believe)

For simplicity's sake I've broken the story into three parts, and so you aren't over loaded with text at once, have placed them in spoilers for you to read one at a time.

Feel free to point out any spelling/grammatical/punctuation errors I may have missed. I tried to catch them all but I am only human and they do slip by at times. I don't bite, so don't be scared about leaving a comment behind, I love comments. I just want to know what people think.
Also, this is the first time I've ever written anything MS based. ^_^
I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

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Part 1


Part 2


Part 3
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Re: Journey to Silva-An MS Story

Postby cusith » November 21st, 2011, 12:32:45 pm

This was really good, Kat. I enjoiyed it a lot. There were a few mistakes, but mostly just missing words.

".....Minicorn rides when had been a child..." should be "when she had been a child."
"...........making the frightening sound....." should be "making the most frightening sound..."

and the only other thing I could find was at the end, "concurred her fear" should be "conquered her fear."

Over all this was a really good story, it was short but it still provided a lot of detail and insight into Kora's character. I hope you post more shorts soon, I'll definitely read them ^_^
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Re: Journey to Silva-An MS Story

Postby BluMajica » November 21st, 2011, 12:44:37 pm

I agree with cusith - really good - though I didn't pick up on the missing words they did lol

and i also would like to read more!

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Re: Journey to Silva-An MS Story

Postby BBkat » May 16th, 2012, 8:06:15 pm

Oh, thank you for pointing those out. I fixed them now.


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